New Business Models – Working Together on Value Creation

Valueproposition Solarcooperation:
The Solar Cooperation West Friesland creates connection and exchange between residents of a local community, and offers them an approachable possibility to generate their own solar power, in case they don’t have a suitable roof or space. In this way, we contribute to improve environmental and social commitment in achieving a CO2-neutral region.

The feedback I got on my valuepropostion is that it probably is formulated in highfalutin language, that might 'scare' people an d potential customers.

I'm not sure about that, but I sure want to know how you all think about it. And maybe there are some suggestions to simplify it.

thanks and regards Michel